SK 텔레콤에서 대규모 Usim 사태가 있은지 얼마 안됐는데 LG와 KT도 비슷한 개인정보 누출 사태가 있나봅니다.
아직은 확실한 건 아니고 당국에서 조사는 한다는데 스마트 폰에 저장된 정보가 민감한게 많은데 이런 일이 반복되는 걸 보면 정보 사회의 숙명이라고 해야할지 아니면 관련 기업의 태만이라고 봐야할지 모르겠습니다.
Calls grow for probe into KT, LG Uplus data leak allegations - The Korea Times
Seoul YMCA urged the Personal Information Protection Commission to investigate alleged data leaks at KT and LG Uplus on Thursday, filing a formal r...
www.koreatimes.co.kr
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It is said that LG Uplus and KT allegedly have data leak. As a LG Uplus user, I am concerned with this allegation.
As we see, there are lots of information in our smart phone such as private activities, financial information and very private secrets.
I watched a movie, titled ‘Intimate Strangers.’ It that movie, friends have a game to reveal their discussions on the phone in front of them. Just an exposure can cause big issues to the person.
The authorities announced to probe this allegatons but users do not trust the authorities` announcement because similar incident occurred before. For LG in 2018 and 2023, for KT, it has recently been accused of destroying part of its server.
According to Koreatimes, speculation over a data breach has surged after the global hacking journal reported that two anonymous hackers had obtaion 8 gigabytes of leaked data from an attacker known as Kim. Kim, which is suspeced to have relations with North Korea.
Anyway, severe inspection and transparent disclosure to this incident is necessary.
여전히 크게 볼품은 없지만 많이 나아지고는 있습니다.
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It is alleged that LG Uplus and KT may have suffered a data leak.
As an LG Uplus user, I am deeply concerned about this allegation.
As we know, our smartphones contain a vast amount of personal information such as private activities, financial records, and even intimate secrets.
I recently watched a movie titled Intimate Strangers. In that film, a group of friends play a game where they reveal all their phone messages in front of each other. It shows how even a single exposure of personal data can cause serious consequences.
The authorities announced that they would probe these allegations, but users remain skeptical because similar incidents have already occurred. For LG Uplus, data leaks were reported in 2018 and 2023. As for KT, it has recently been accused of destroying part of its server.
According to the Korea Times, speculation over a data breach surged after a global hacking journal reported that two anonymous hackers had obtained 8 gigabytes of leaked data from an attacker known as “Kim,” who is suspected of having ties to North Korea.
In any case, a thorough investigation and transparent disclosure of this incident are absolutely necessary.
주요 수정 포인트
- It is said that → It is alleged that / may have suffered
→ 기사 문맥상 “소문”보다는 “의혹/혐의”라는 뉘앙스가 적절. - lots of information → a vast amount of personal information
→ 좀 더 학술적이고 기사체에 가까운 어휘. - Just an exposure can cause big issues → even a single exposure can cause serious consequences
→ “big issues” 대신 “serious consequences”가 더 자연스럽고 무게감 있음. - the authorities announced to probe → announced that they would probe
→ 문법적으로 고쳐야 함. - users do not trust the authorities` announcement → users remain skeptical
→ 신문 기사체에 자주 쓰이는 표현. - had obtaion → had obtained (오타 수정)
- severe inspection → thorough investigation
→ “severe inspection”은 어색. “thorough investigation”이 적절.
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